Another one dispatched on behalf of , your majesty. News from afar say you requested, and seek for a critique.
Agreed with others on soft, monochromatic color scheme giving a dream-like quality to this illustration. As if it was fading in, and pulling together from the paper which it was based in. However, that's not to say that the shading, or strength of contrast shouldn't be soft either; to another viewer, jaded and more prone to pick more meanings, the light shading may reinforce the idea is timid, and weak like the shading used on it. To another, it may appear it's due to a lack of confidence in one's ability to express ideas on paper, or the subject matter.
The lion here is represented as a noble being; a figure of power, and strength. Like the lion, you; the artist; must express this strength through your abilities, and skills to illustrate, not just say this.
For example, the whiskers are undefined as they recede back into the fur; they're too light. The shading between the woman's face, and the lion appear to be forced, as they're more darker than the rest of the picture (do allow yourself to compensate for that, by making the rest of the image as dark, or equally darker).
The lion should have the authority over the picture, and be the main focus point, for the lighter woman seems to be taking up more of the share on the page.
As another fellow artist, although I don't specialize in this medium as often as you do, get a stronger shade of pencils to pull the lion out of the paper, and into this world:
For whiskers, fur, and other fine details, use a hard (H) pencil. 4H, and 2H would be fine. For mid tones, use an HB pencil. Darker tones should be done with a 2B, and 6B pencil (the darkest of dark pencils, which one should take for strongest confidence in their traditional arts).
For the woman, define the features of her face a little bit more clearer: especially the planes of the face. You may need to check that out, if you need better understanding, although your other illustrations seem to express this more confidently.
The planes of a dress shouldn't appear as marks, as I notice here... or hair-like marks, with varying degrees of intensity, either. Again, use a darker pencil to define the degrees, and a harder pen to define the edges, like a palette knife to a painting.
Brighter points in the picture, to make the lion shine in his aura, can be achieved through white pencil, our eraser. I notice you take the tone of the paper very well to achieve the monochromatic quality, but you can utilise that for stronger effect.
Kudos to you for using colors on the lion's eyes, and the woman's jewellery for emphasis, and effect, however this may mean you'd need to change the title of the picture, as this shows focus on a completely different subject matter here (jewellery, and eyes vs lion, and woman themselves).
Again, the lion should be main focus in picture because that's what you're aiming for, so should be the strongest, and dignify that position.
Oh, majesty, I understand your woes for incompletion in expressing thoughts, concepts, or subject matter on paper-- you, and me, like many others, have fallen into this pitfall once in an often. It's just a matter of being reassured, or needing a few things pointed out again to help us get ourselves back on our feet.
Alas, this concludes the end this enlightening encounter with each other. I must make do, like others who've come to meet you, and be able to discuss a few things; and to be honest, it's been a delight; though I wish you best luck, as these skills invested in you continue to reveal themselves to us, and more importantly, to you.
I humbly apologize for my late reply, sir. Thank you for the time you spent writing your critique, I find every line of your speech extremely useful.
Yet I have to say, and forgive me for my boldness, that indeed the lion hasn’t got enough emphasis in the picture: I, the artist, am not a lion at all. Not yet, at least. That is why I wanted to underline the woman’s presence, as if the lion was nothing but a projection (I could have just said that it is because I had never tried to draw animals and I suck at shading, but this is such a noble conversation and I wouldn’t dare to utter such insolent words).
Gallant young man, I am honestly delighted at your considerate words and precious advices. They mirror what an artist should be: a proficient, wise individual with human experience to share. What else might we be, if not spiritual beings on a human journey?
But reassurance is a sweet poison and its effect doesn’t last long. And woes are yet to end, for those who keep searching and learning. If you and art intend thus to disdain, it does the more enthrall me; and I know I’ll remain in captivity. Well, I will pray to God on high that my constancy may be seen.
Now farewell, adieu, to God I pray to prosper thee.
I'm here on behalf of because your piece was in the group's critique requested folder. The picture is really beautiful, the lion looks really majestic!! The soft shading makes it look dreamy..although you could color it, it seems fine the way it is Good job!
"I'm here on behalf of because your piece was in the group's critique requested folder." I think that this drawing is very beautiful the lion and the goddess are done well. The colors make the picture very soft and "dreamy". Normally, I would suggest using more color so it looks less sketchy... but it looks right with this drawing the way it is.
Ila è bellissimissimo! Stupendo! Adoro il gioco di ombre sul viso della ragazza e la luce sui suoi capelli! E il gioielli sono meravigliosi! Il leone poi è magnifico!Ha uno sguardo d'oro che ti ipnotizza. Mi piace un sacchissimo ma se proprio devo fare una critica forse la faccia del leone è un po' larga, ma considerando quanto sia difficile disegnare i felini hai fatto un lavoro da maestro! : )
Grazie mille!! Mi fa davvero piacere che apprezzi questi dettagli, anche se avrei potuto sforzarmi di più, soprattutto con i gioielli! Quanto al leone, hai ragione, a dirla tutta mi sembra anche un po' piatto rispetto al resto... ma riproverò sicuramente! : )
Naah i gioielli secondo me sono perfetti! E la bocca e il naso del leone sono stupendi solo che dove ci sono le "guance" e la criniera è meno ombreggiato della ragazza, ma è molto bello comunque, sembra quasi uno spirito guardiano che veglia su di lei : )